Kia ora! I am a Year 7 student in Room 5 at Ahipara School, in the Far North of New Zealand. My teacher is Ms Peters. This is where I share my learning. Please leave a positive, thoughtful, helpful comment.
Kia ora Eli, I really enjoyed reading your descriptive holiday recount and the way you used the five senses to describe what you did in the holidays. Maybe next time you could work on checking your punctuation. Blog ya later! Ms Peters.
Kia ora Eli, Kedjron here. I really like reading your recount about hunting and how you did show don't tell. I also liked your background,It fits in with the story. Keep up the good work.Was it easy to come up with the writing? Blog ya later.
Tēnā koe Eli it's Michael from Room 5. I like your recount it is very interesting and cool, it was also hard to guess what it was. Maybe next time you could use some more punctuation. E noho rā.
Kia ora Eli my name is Wairua, a year 8 from Paihia School. I really enjoyed reading your blog post about your holiday recount because you have told me what you were hunting for and what you were doing. Also because you put a picture for your background. I haven’t been hunting for a long time but It sounds like you had fun.
Kia ora Eli,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your descriptive holiday recount and the way you used the five senses to describe what you did in the holidays. Maybe next time you could work on checking your punctuation. Blog ya later! Ms Peters.
Kia ora Eli,
ReplyDeleteKedjron here. I really like reading your recount about hunting and how you did show don't tell. I also liked your background,It fits in with the story. Keep up the good work.Was it easy to come up with the writing? Blog ya later.
Kia ora Eli, it´s Bryson. I like your holiday recount and how added lots of detail. Maybe next time you could add more punctuation. Blog ya later.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Bryson, Eli here thanks for the comment. Next time I will add more punctuation. Blog ya later.
DeleteTēnā koe Eli it's Michael from Room 5. I like your recount it is very interesting and cool, it was also hard to guess what it was. Maybe next time you could use some more punctuation. E noho rā.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Eli my name is Wairua, a year 8 from Paihia School. I really enjoyed reading your blog post about your holiday recount because you have told me what you were hunting for and what you were doing. Also because you put a picture for your background. I haven’t been hunting for a long time but It sounds like you had fun.
ReplyDeleteHow long were you out hunting for?